Hello
This is my first subject, I’m pretty new to writing sorry if there’s stuff if you think I used the word “subject” a lot maybe you can change it I guess. Idea took like a good 30 minutes to think of and 2 hours of writing.
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Thoughts as I read it….. A bit choppy, and flow could use some work. Some spelling and grammatical errors (which I took care of). A bit sparse on the description. Overall, a decent article but it defiantly still needs some polishing.
To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
Thanks for the feedback, I'll try to think of more ways to possibly polish the final product to make it much better. Any advise on how to polish it?
hmmm…. A couple of em' but if you want to work with me on a sandbox re-write id be happy to work with you! Also, dont be discouraged by any feedback you receive. We are glad to have activity back in the community :)
To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
Welcome to the Insurgency. I hope you will enjoy your time here.
Here are some of my thoughts:
In case K-9 is not some military code i think it should be written out as canine as i think to recall that K-9 was a joke from classic doctor who.
As i am not natively English i may have misunderstood it, but isn't "it’s" an contraction of "it is", making "its" the proper word to indicate possession? You did used "it's" quit a lot in the article to indicate possession.
Its anomalous properties consist of somehow knowledge of hateful thoughts from inanimate objects to even just based on thought.
Should be: The subject, can sens hateful thoughts in animate and inanimate objects. Its ability to do so is fare greater than what could reasonably be expected of a member of his species.
speed of 0.25 seconds per frame
The real world dose not have frames. Speed should be measured in km/s or reaction time of X seconds.
In hope this helps.
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
hey, its is: it is and it's is the possessive so he's right in that respect
To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
Not sure what Multas said, so here is what i was referring to: Source.
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
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To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
any time, and do let me know if you want to collaborate on future projects. Also the idea was very unique and creative, where did you get the idea from?
To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
well i guess it all worked out in the end lol
To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
Well, now you jinxed it.
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
Oh no, what have I done?!
To create fiction, one must live in fiction.
It seems that the image is no longer available. We should probably find a replacement image.
Agreed. I am not currently where I keep my backups, but I will try whether I actually have the image somewhere.
It might be a problem that the image was hosted on discord.
If I can not recover it we can start looking for a new one.
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
…and that's why you shouldn't leech/hotlink. Honestly, we should make a rule against that.
I checked my own archives (both from wget and httrack) and the internet archives, but none actually bothered to download the image (or Discord runs anti-spider measures, which is likely). So unless Meta finds something, it's gone.
Were we certain it was properly licensed to begin with? We (read: you) should go and check for all of our old stuff, and properly enforce attribution for future postings.
Eschew elucidation, espouse obfuscation.
My backup came up blank. The Image is lost.
I am accepting replacement proposals. If no one else puts something forward I will put a picture in myself. Let me give this a 3 days window.
Also, I second the addition to not hot-link on the mainsite. Sandbox and Visual Records are something where that might cause problems (sandbox because placeholder images there should not be saved on the site as some do not comply with CC and VR has a category of artifacts I created that are all hotlinked on purpose).
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
The new image is an edit by Meta Wonderrat, licensed under CC-BY-SA 3.0 and CC-BY-SA 4.0.
The original image was created by diveofficer and is licensed under CC-BY 2.0
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
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