First thought:
This is making me violently angry for no apparent reason, strange, but noted. Got the urge to write a boss character that is unhappy with the presentation (for some reason that boss was situated in a dimly lit room filled with headless mannequins and the boss itself was just a face on a scream behind said mannequins, with the main mannequin-screen-combo siting behind a large, rotten, wooden desk).
Next, wait a minute, this is like the thing the Foundation did. Wait, it is not, its like the stuff i tried to do with DIA. No, that isn't right ether. Megonali? Old reference is old. No, can't pin it down.
I somehow want someone from the audience to stand up and shoot the speaker. (Gets idea for undercover agent that was placed in the room by "flat-screen boss" who is cringing the entire time and desperately tries to find an excuses to trigger the bombs he hid in the room)
We are badly equipped, but guns are not so expensive as to not give the guys "going in" one, just in case. If we miss that thing by one bullet, that is than fault of the administration and "flat-screen boss" is just about to make an angry call to whom ever green-lit this version of his old department.
"THE RULE: DON'T SCARE THE NEWBIES HAS BEEN WRITTEN ON A GOLD PLATE IN THE PRESENTERS OFFICE FOR NEAR 50 YEARS, DID YOU NEVER ONCE READ IT?"
And i am coming to realize now why this piece awakens so much anger in me. This thing is almost everything wrong with introductions. Vulgar, uncontrolled, misleading, unprofessional. I accept such behavior in the field, but not in the introduction to the field.
Base-training, non-lethal combat, negotiation, emotion suppression, cultural context, red flags, the quick "grab and run", solo runs, work without back-up, style of documentation, handwriting, basic radio and transmitter technology, your phone (the best helper since the concealed automatic riffle), "how to look without looking", social engineering, lock-picking, the "wonders of stink bombs", how to conceal flash storage, wi-fi hacking, paying subcontractors, right placement for surveillance devices, moment-to-moment decision making and on top of it all "know when to get out".
All in all, nice work. It produced a very hard, emotional reaction, something only certain pieces can pull off. I saw some spelling errors in there as well and speech dose not have the feature of putting things in brackets, but other than that…
It is definitely a valid version of an Insurgency FID, just a different one than the guys i send out into the field graduated from.
EDIT: We need a modified version of "this thing".
Fighting Monsters and Language since 2016.
